12-13-2020, 07:19 AM
Hi Phillip-
Stealing and lending indicate personification and it may make more sense if the first line is something like: "fat sun lends silver" .
The last line could be something to describe the "tension" between the two, like the new moon needing a larger loan (of light).
Cool idea to work with in such a compressed form, where every word counts.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
Stealing and lending indicate personification and it may make more sense if the first line is something like: "fat sun lends silver" .
The last line could be something to describe the "tension" between the two, like the new moon needing a larger loan (of light).
Cool idea to work with in such a compressed form, where every word counts.
Thanks for the read,
Mark