12-03-2020, 01:38 AM
Hello Tb,
A nice thought here, but it's been done to death already.
Wonderland and winter's glory come across as cliches that don't add anything new.
Stir in haste - cuts against the gentle picture shown in the rest of the poem.
nighttime moonlight - as apposed to daytime moonlight?
Snowflakes gently fall / flickering in the (something) moonlight etc ? A chance here for fresh imagery.
just my thoughts............P
A nice thought here, but it's been done to death already.
Wonderland and winter's glory come across as cliches that don't add anything new.
Stir in haste - cuts against the gentle picture shown in the rest of the poem.
nighttime moonlight - as apposed to daytime moonlight?
Snowflakes gently fall / flickering in the (something) moonlight etc ? A chance here for fresh imagery.
just my thoughts............P