Last Words

[Miley]

Kind faces gather round my bed
and I am moved Nice enjambment, shocking in a subtle way, feels like a movie cut
to a room, clean and pale
where a machine at my head
breathes a sigh
as I exhale. These last two lines are quite and powerful, my favorite moment in the poem. The machine and the man breathing together, the man dependent on the machine to breath. Very melancholy. 

Last words?......already spoken 
become last thoughts to be sang.
A token pang for each heart broken,
a song of loss for every wrong.

Then, what of bliss,
that bridal kiss
and the pride of family?
No, not this....
the catalyst of heightened memory. I don't really understand this stanza. I take it as the narrator reflecting on their wife/family but I'm not sure if No, not this... is a rejection of the narrators current circumstance or to their memories. The last line I really don't know. 

But, as a boy beside the sea, This return to childhood is really beautiful. Parallels between the expanse of the sea, and the eternal nature of death, beginning to End
when all I had were pen and pad
and the joy of writing poetry. Poetry ( :

Hello, this poem is touching in many places. I seem to have a predisposition against rhyming, but I do feel as though the moments in which you bend the poem around the rhymes are the weakest. The first and last stanza read the strongest for me, especially the first which nearly holds its own as a poem.