11-16-2020, 08:23 PM
Hello Alex,
thank you for reading and commenting. I sometimes mix the rhyming scheme to keep things interesting and not sound like Dr Zuess. (free rhyming, a new form?)
I can't agree with your suggestion to simply get rid of the rhymes (that I 'worry' about). Yes, there some issues in the middle verse that need addressing, but why throw out everything else? I like to write in an engaging style (that includes rhymes), as well as driving the narrative and message, so I certainly would not be happier if my poetry were less effective in that respect.
Good point on the comma, a quick fix I can do right now.
Hello mlea,
thank you for your encouraging words, much appreciated.
cheers.........Philip
thank you for reading and commenting. I sometimes mix the rhyming scheme to keep things interesting and not sound like Dr Zuess. (free rhyming, a new form?)
I can't agree with your suggestion to simply get rid of the rhymes (that I 'worry' about). Yes, there some issues in the middle verse that need addressing, but why throw out everything else? I like to write in an engaging style (that includes rhymes), as well as driving the narrative and message, so I certainly would not be happier if my poetry were less effective in that respect.
Good point on the comma, a quick fix I can do right now.
Hello mlea,
thank you for your encouraging words, much appreciated.
cheers.........Philip