10-19-2020, 07:35 PM
(10-09-2020, 10:17 PM)dukealien Wrote: Forest PondClever last line.
White egret poses
on reflected trees and sky–
plucks fish from branches.
Would be improved if there's an alternative to 'poses on' - I think there's 2 syllables too many (not in the sense of haiku formalism, but just what sounds pleasing to the ear)
