10-10-2020, 06:16 AM
They both seem solid (as one of our better critics here often says in valued praise).
In the first, I don't see quite how that line could be improved - "until at last they quiesce" sounds well and means even more, but the word's so uncommon my spell-checker has never heard of it.
In the second, I read it as a long build-up to the final couplet - which is dynamite, worth writing in my copy-book. It may not have been intended that way, more as an excuse by the speaker... but when generalized to everyone, wow.
In the first, I don't see quite how that line could be improved - "until at last they quiesce" sounds well and means even more, but the word's so uncommon my spell-checker has never heard of it.
In the second, I read it as a long build-up to the final couplet - which is dynamite, worth writing in my copy-book. It may not have been intended that way, more as an excuse by the speaker... but when generalized to everyone, wow.
Non-practicing atheist