10-06-2020, 06:37 PM
Hi Mercedes - yes, ‘wobbling’ adds an interesting texture/life/‘colour’/layer. At first I thought of the moon wobbling because of the rippling water, then the ‘and me’ sank in and I began to wonder about the poet. This feels like a small hint of a larger story, which is as it should be.
More importantly, it has that haiku-like format, with the cut after ‘river’.
More importantly, it has that haiku-like format, with the cut after ‘river’.