in the event of moon disaster

[alonso ramoran]

Thank you, Alex! I love your suggestion about creating space around “splitting tension.” Will most likely implement. There is a reason I chose to capitalize the first word of each line…maybe read once more and see if you can spot it
Perhaps a hint would be to tell you that the em dash you suggested really is meant to be a hyphen (thought I had to look it up to be sure). The full word is meant to be forestep.

I noticed why shortly after rereading your poem, but I think it could be handled more subtly and cause less of a distraction to the reader if the capitalization is done normally. Just my opinion

Warm regards,
Alex