08-07-2020, 08:57 AM
JN,
Very good for a first poem. Not wild about the line truncation, lack of caps and the long run-on sentence. Most of this is affectation and does not enhance the poem. However points for some good simile and metaphor.
best,
dale
Very good for a first poem. Not wild about the line truncation, lack of caps and the long run-on sentence. Most of this is affectation and does not enhance the poem. However points for some good simile and metaphor.
best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.