hummingbird

[Exit]

hummingbird

anoint me with grit and 
throw colors at me,
that i may lap up the
      nectar of life
curling my toes, i 
feel what it is to be here,
be near

     who is I AM that 
BEING would sow me in such 
fertile soil
         and
         congruently
blossom within me

rub my eyes and beat my wings
longing falls as a bow on strings
as i fit myself into place
                              squeeze myself into the gaps 
                         between
             tectonic plates



This is my very first poem to be shared with anyone besides my boyfriend lol. I would be so grateful for any and all feedback you may have!

This is perfect. Nearly. three things. 1) I can see no reason for not capitalising "Anoint" and "I". 2) I could live without the italics. And 3) "...as bows on strings" is tighter and doesn't harm the meaning.

Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing. And if I were you I'd ignore all that and not change a thing anyway. 



Thanks for sharing it.