hummingbird
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Thank you so much for your feedback, busker! I’m thrilled that you enjoyed it. I too was unsure about the rhyming portion, as I feel it may fit better in a separate poem with a more fleshed out rhyme scheme. 
The final stanza is meant to be a concluding call towards readying oneself to take on life (rubbing eyes:waking up, beating wings:revving up your body-engine, and I just so strongly associate longing with the sound of violins/cellos).
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hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-06-2020, 11:07 AM
RE: hummingbird - by busker - 08-06-2020, 01:40 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-06-2020, 09:16 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Tiger the Lion - 08-13-2020, 07:27 AM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-13-2020, 01:21 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Valerie Please - 08-06-2020, 10:13 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-06-2020, 10:57 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Exit - 08-07-2020, 05:08 AM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-07-2020, 10:38 AM
RE: hummingbird - by Erthona - 08-07-2020, 08:57 AM
RE: hummingbird - by busker - 08-07-2020, 02:02 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-07-2020, 10:42 PM
RE: hummingbird - by busker - 08-08-2020, 06:14 AM
RE: hummingbird - by DashwoodMedia - 08-13-2020, 02:20 AM
RE: hummingbird - by Joyful Noise - 08-13-2020, 06:11 AM
RE: hummingbird - by rowens - 08-13-2020, 06:26 AM
RE: hummingbird - by Caravano - 08-15-2020, 01:37 PM
RE: hummingbird - by Erthona - 08-16-2020, 02:02 AM



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