08-06-2020, 09:16 PM
Thank you so much for your feedback, busker! I’m thrilled that you enjoyed it. I too was unsure about the rhyming portion, as I feel it may fit better in a separate poem with a more fleshed out rhyme scheme.
The final stanza is meant to be a concluding call towards readying oneself to take on life (rubbing eyes:waking up, beating wings:revving up your body-engine, and I just so strongly associate longing with the sound of violins/cellos).
The final stanza is meant to be a concluding call towards readying oneself to take on life (rubbing eyes:waking up, beating wings:revving up your body-engine, and I just so strongly associate longing with the sound of violins/cellos).

