08-04-2020, 03:15 AM
Hey duke I really enjoyed the poem, I was in the room, in the dark seeing all my stars of burning energy. Mapping my own constellations even. If I have anything to add by way of crit and I haven't read the original, so I'm sorry if you are groaning at this point and thinking no more edits please, but I think the last verse detracts us from the question posed which is a really good question about how we have become so reliant on tech and the value it brings to us. I think S4 is a stand out but the whole piece works well and makes one think, cant ask for much more. Best Keith
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