The Tempest (Haiku)

[Tiger the Lion]

Sunshine, then dark clouds--
Slanted rain, thunder, lightning.
Then, sunshine again.

Adam DH Torkelson

I agree with both Busker and Exit. The problem with English Language Haiku trying too hard to adhere to a 5-7-5 format is we have too much opportunity to become verbose, when brevity is our objective. That is not to say that ELH cannot be effective with 17 syllables, but it's not a format we need to regard as gospel. If you said...

sunshine
storm
more sunshine

you wouldn't lose anything but descriptors, and the reader would be no less informed. That is not a specific suggestion, only a paring down to the absolute bones of the thing. 

Thanks for posting and welcome to the Pen.