The Tempest (Haiku)
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(07-31-2020, 12:11 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  Sunshine, then dark clouds--
Slanted rain, thunder, lightning.
Then, sunshine again.

Adam DH Torkelson
I wish all poems were this short. I like it. Although, it is pretty cliche, good weather—bad weather—good weather, and it doesn't do much else with that sentiment; but, I think that's why I like it, it cuts the concept back to its root. It's not trying to dress this familiar idea up in flowery language and tediously drawn-out metaphors. And that simple directness makes you forget you've probably heard it a million times before. 
Having said that, I do agree with Busker that it has too much going on to be Haiku.
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The Tempest (Haiku) - by Torkelburger - 07-31-2020, 12:11 AM
RE: The Tempest (Haiku) - by busker - 08-02-2020, 11:11 AM
RE: The Tempest (Haiku) - by Exit - 08-02-2020, 11:54 PM
RE: The Tempest (Haiku) - by Tiger the Lion - 08-03-2020, 12:45 AM
RE: The Tempest (Haiku) - by Torkelburger - 08-03-2020, 10:48 PM
RE: The Tempest (Haiku) - by rowens - 08-08-2020, 03:53 AM



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