Before the rain

[Knot]

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Hi Penned.

I think the addition is a move in the right direction, but a little too obvious, you don't need 'a vision of him'

and the laundry/conservatory chair/there rhymes dispel the mood, for me. Not to mention whether 'yellow

shirt and corduroy trousers' constitute linen. Do they? I haven't a clue.

Just a thought

She spreads her empty bed

over the backs of old pine chairs

Phoebe sees a white castle

a dragon roars outside.

They wait for rain.

Best, Knot

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