07-20-2020, 12:43 AM
Since this poem has been thoroughly critiqued already, I am only here to say that I really enjoyed it as well, I loved the tangibility of the descriptions (the cold and heavy belt buckle, the greying sponge, the footprints, etc.)
I saw someone bring up the cigar above. I can't speak for the author, but for me personally I LOVE the cigar detail. It is phallic, it has a lovely smell that would be part of the husband's own smell, it's something he puts in his mouth. I think the cigar is a perfect tangible stand-in for the sensory and sensual feelings the speaker has for the husband.
Well done, enjoyable thread.
I saw someone bring up the cigar above. I can't speak for the author, but for me personally I LOVE the cigar detail. It is phallic, it has a lovely smell that would be part of the husband's own smell, it's something he puts in his mouth. I think the cigar is a perfect tangible stand-in for the sensory and sensual feelings the speaker has for the husband.
Well done, enjoyable thread.