Great Forces

[Knot]

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Hi Abigail,
just to add a few crumbs to the feast Valerie provided.

I don't find the first three verses that engaging, for instance, is there a reason you might be
expected to understand and/or control time or the weather? Are there those that can?

Agree about 'I am a child to trees', but 'magnificent rock formations ... ' is far too much of a
mouthful. Why not simply 'mountains'?

For me, it comes alive here,

As a child I was a benevolent god,
rescued bugs from rainstorms
combed the flooded grass
for ailing bodies
dragged them to safety.

I don't do this anymore.
Some things are too small
to stop for.

and I think you might get a more interesting piece were you to start with this section.


Best, Knot



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