Constellations - edit2
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Have you walked into a darkened room
of your house and been surprised
elated by its many tiny lights
all glowing blue or green, perhaps a few
in red or solar yellow?

Some are numbers - clocks - and some
flash like the infamous
twelve AM and please.set.time
but most are simple telltales
each confirming that its host
is drawing juice.

So coal burns, and gas, and nuclei
are split so you may see
your appliances are keeping time
your tech is charging
and your smoke alarm’s alert.

Are they worth it
all these winking stars of light?
Even if each spark drew life
from wind or water interrupted
in its rushing flight?

Well, some might say
those greater constellations up above
are wasted on us, too–
but still they shine.


I bow to the critics on need for a question mark, and to avoid ALL CAPS.  A few minor changes near that question mark, also.

Thanks for the good critiques; glad it was otherwise appreciated.
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Messages In This Thread
Constellations - edit2 - by dukealien - 06-15-2020, 04:29 AM
RE: Constellations - by Mayfair - 06-15-2020, 04:18 PM
RE: Constellations - by penneddown - 06-20-2020, 06:56 AM
RE: Constellations - edit - by dukealien - 06-21-2020, 06:43 AM
RE: Constellations - edit - by Torkelburger - 07-30-2020, 11:57 PM
RE: Constellations - edit - by Keith - 08-04-2020, 03:15 AM
RE: Constellations - edit - by busker - 08-04-2020, 03:20 AM
RE: Constellations - edit - by dukealien - 08-04-2020, 08:03 AM
RE: Constellations - edit2 - by dukealien - 08-10-2020, 05:43 AM



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