Nature
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I liked reading this. I don’t think you need to go about explaining how or why you love your friend. In fact, I already feel you maybe explain a bit much. Personally I think you could remove “because I love her”. You don’t need to tell us that you love her, you can show us through the imagery in your poem. Which you already do to an extent, but I think you could push this further.
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Nature - by ComposerMike - 05-12-2020, 03:00 PM
RE: Nature - by Pure Evil - 06-09-2020, 05:51 AM
RE: Nature - by Bunx - 06-10-2020, 01:25 AM
RE: Nature - by ComposerMike - 06-10-2020, 03:15 AM
RE: Nature - by penneddown - 06-12-2020, 12:50 AM
RE: Nature - by Lilly123 - 09-09-2020, 11:25 AM
RE: Nature - by mizron - 09-12-2020, 06:04 AM
RE: Nature - by huntermitch - 09-16-2020, 02:21 AM
RE: Nature - by nearlyhere - 10-10-2020, 09:57 AM
RE: Nature - by TranquillityBase - 02-01-2021, 09:14 PM



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