03-09-2020, 08:02 AM
Duke,
Good revision. I think it would be better to just state the type of flag, rather than expecting the reader to guess it. From your comments I would guess it would be a Confederate flag. Maybe a hint such as:
"Veterans' of the Civil War Cemetery"
I see no reason to be coy about the primary thesis of unacknowledged racial bigotry. It has been tiptoed around enough, I see no need to do so in this poem. Otherwise a solid write.
best,
dale
Good revision. I think it would be better to just state the type of flag, rather than expecting the reader to guess it. From your comments I would guess it would be a Confederate flag. Maybe a hint such as:
"Veterans' of the Civil War Cemetery"
I see no reason to be coy about the primary thesis of unacknowledged racial bigotry. It has been tiptoed around enough, I see no need to do so in this poem. Otherwise a solid write.
best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.