03-04-2020, 07:31 AM
Duke,
Good idea to juxtapose, it could work either way. I just have a preference for a shorter line there and for me I guess the "yield up" seems to beg the question of to whom.
This is ballad meter, so yes line three "refusing pleas for more time" needs a syllable between "pleas" and "more", but I have no solution that does not seem forced. Do you have a suggestion?
Ah yes, the CR line, mostly for me. I do that in all of my poems. How did you notice it?
Thanks for giving it a look.
dale
Good idea to juxtapose, it could work either way. I just have a preference for a shorter line there and for me I guess the "yield up" seems to beg the question of to whom.
This is ballad meter, so yes line three "refusing pleas for more time" needs a syllable between "pleas" and "more", but I have no solution that does not seem forced. Do you have a suggestion?
Ah yes, the CR line, mostly for me. I do that in all of my poems. How did you notice it?
Thanks for giving it a look.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.