Jordan Peterson - edit2
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Jordan Peterson

He floated comatose, becalmed
by physical dependency
benzodiazepine induced,
in artificial peace.

He rises pale but powerful,
addiction cured in Russian sleep,
bright river of uncommon sense
hostility had dammed.


edit1;

He floated comatose, detached,
forgetting poisoned memory
of artificial peace.

He rises pale and sensible,
bright river of clear common sense
its enemies had dammed.

original version;

Jordan’s River


He slept to quell his agony
of brain and nerves remembering
benzodiazepine prescribed
to soothe his sharp anxiety
provoked by baseless infamy
to lotus-eater’s calm.

He slept, submerged by Russian drugs
in dreamless gray unconsciousness,
as if in Lethe’s after-death
forgetting while his doctors cleansed
his body’s poisoned memory
of artificial peace.

Now he emerges, sensitive
and sensible as ever, knaves
deriding him for weakness they
exploited to dam up his words
of common sense they cannot bear
when Jordan’s wisdom flows.


This probably belongs in Miscellaneous, the old outward-facing board, but it's a shame about the politics involved... and anyway, it's pretty raw and could use a good critiquing.
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Jordan Peterson - edit2 - by dukealien - 02-15-2020, 07:50 AM
RE: Jordan’s River - by Erthona - 02-17-2020, 01:31 PM
RE: Jordan’s River - by dukealien - 02-17-2020, 10:40 PM
RE: Jordan’s River - by Knot - 02-17-2020, 11:59 PM
RE: Jordan Peterson - edit - by dukealien - 02-23-2020, 06:20 AM
RE: Jordan Peterson - edit - by Knot - 02-23-2020, 09:48 PM
RE: Jordan Peterson - edit - by dukealien - 02-26-2020, 09:56 AM



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