To Me, Fair Friend, You Never Can Be Old

[Joshua Smith]

It's a really beautiful poem but the rest of it seems cliché and unnecessary, Was that huge spacing for another poem or is it all in one?

In the first six stanzas there is a question posed; in the final six stanzas a response is given.  In this I attempted to take a simple back and forth that is easy to recognize (hence the clichés) and try my hand at broad symbolism.  The one posing a question and the responder are suppose to represent something slightly less cliché.  It is evident it did not land.  The concept is geared toward a particular audience, but I had hoped that I would be able to convey an undercurrent of meaning even if people outside the audience were unable to see the particulars.  Unfortunately I am not currently capable of that.  Thank you for your response, and I am glad you liked the fist part.    Oh yeah, the big space.  Ideally the response portion is in a separate column beside the portion that poses the question.  A left page vs. right page situation.
I appreciate the time you extended towards this piece.