01-08-2020, 05:30 AM
Hi dukealien and Knot,
Thank you both for your critiques. I didn’t mention it in my original post but feedback is highly encouraged here.
I’m starting to wonder if posting this in installments was a good idea because I find myself going back and renaming things and changing small details. I’m considering either staggering the next two parts or just posting the whole story here once it’s done.
Knot,
I will go over the story again with your words in mind. The inconsistency in detail is an important thing for me to know of and I’m really glad you pointed that out, but the extraneous amount of detail is a point I’d like to talk about. I could rewrite this as “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest,” but why did he wake up alone in the forest? How does he feel about being alone in the forest? What forest did he wake up in? I think these are necessary details to build upon in the story’s continuation that “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest,” wouldn’t lay any foundation for. Not only that, how could any reader invest themselves in “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest”? Still, that is not to say that there are details that can be pared away.
Again, thank you both for your feedback.
Alex
Thank you both for your critiques. I didn’t mention it in my original post but feedback is highly encouraged here.
I’m starting to wonder if posting this in installments was a good idea because I find myself going back and renaming things and changing small details. I’m considering either staggering the next two parts or just posting the whole story here once it’s done.
Knot,
I will go over the story again with your words in mind. The inconsistency in detail is an important thing for me to know of and I’m really glad you pointed that out, but the extraneous amount of detail is a point I’d like to talk about. I could rewrite this as “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest,” but why did he wake up alone in the forest? How does he feel about being alone in the forest? What forest did he wake up in? I think these are necessary details to build upon in the story’s continuation that “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest,” wouldn’t lay any foundation for. Not only that, how could any reader invest themselves in “Seven year old Ell woke up alone in the forest”? Still, that is not to say that there are details that can be pared away.
Again, thank you both for your feedback.
Alex