Burnt Orange Train

[Todd]

You know what's funny. I read the second critique (which was good--not critiquing the critique). It made me relook at the poem. I honestly did not see this poem on my first few reads as written in formal poetry because of the inconsistent meter. I read this as a narrative free verse with an occasional end rhyme thrown in for the sonics. If a formal poem was the intention than I agree with normalizing the scheme. If not, I'd probably think about shifting the lines so that the rhymes fall midline for the sonics without causing a distraction for those looking for rhyme and meter and having the poem seem off.

Just a thought. Reading critique always makes me consider the choices that are made more.

There are end rhymes in every S, it is definitely not free verse.

No, I totally get what you're saying. I just didn't read it that way. Meter is usually what draws my attention not the end rhyme. Not at all saying you were wrong just it made me look at the piece again.