10-07-2019, 07:22 AM
(10-05-2019, 03:38 AM)Todd Wrote: You know what's funny. I read the second critique (which was good--not critiquing the critique). It made me relook at the poem. I honestly did not see this poem on my first few reads as written in formal poetry because of the inconsistent meter. I read this as a narrative free verse with an occasional end rhyme thrown in for the sonics. If a formal poem was the intention than I agree with normalizing the scheme. If not, I'd probably think about shifting the lines so that the rhymes fall midline for the sonics without causing a distraction for those looking for rhyme and meter and having the poem seem off.There are end rhymes in every S, it is definitely not free verse.
Just a thought. Reading critique always makes me consider the choices that are made more.