Burnt Orange Train

[Todd]

You know what's funny. I read the second critique (which was good--not critiquing the critique). It made me relook at the poem. I honestly did not see this poem on my first few reads as written in formal poetry because of the inconsistent meter. I read this as a narrative free verse with an occasional end rhyme thrown in for the sonics. If a formal poem was the intention than I agree with normalizing the scheme. If not, I'd probably think about shifting the lines so that the rhymes fall midline for the sonics without causing a distraction for those looking for rhyme and meter and having the poem seem off.

Just a thought. Reading critique always makes me consider the choices that are made more.