She Said.

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Hi Knot, thanks for this. Taking on board your feedback, will have a look at the first stanza again, set it up a little better. With ‘deer’ and ‘stood still’, I was hoping they’d give off the same meaning - they’re both deers in his exes sight. The end originally said, ‘she killed her, and killed him too.’. I was trying to make it reference to both his ex killing herself to him by the betrayal, and how the friend she left him for is also now dead to him, and also now this new girl, and him to her too. But couldn’t get it to work right. Can barely get the sentence explaining it to work right so not much hope of getting it in the poem! Think I was trying to get over too many punches at once.
Will expand on it a bit like you suggest, get a bit more descriptive.

Thanks very much for your feedback, really appreciated it.