Air

[Seraphim]

There a plethora of words in the English language which are more precise, offer secondary meaning, and make the rhythm of a line more complicated and interesting, and provide alliteration and other wonderful sounds:

Air

The air around her changed Transformed, altered, metamorphosed,transmuted
From airy ethereal, insubstantial,wispy, vaporous
Now estranged alienated.divorced
Blooming forcefully dynamically, energetically,assertively
Bright colors intense, scintillating,lustrous
Faded 
Forgot the water 
Forgot the sun
Forgot
Her air

I’d like to see this developed on a literal level first, as it doesn’t really say anything to me, then a secondary meaning suggestion.  When editing, the thesaurus is our friend; I’m not being snarky - looking for synonyms often provides me with fresh fodder. Look forward to watching this transmogrify *grin*.