06-29-2019, 01:30 AM
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Hi Seraphim.
Thanks for the explanations (and clearly, the fault is this reader's
).
Her requirement - the requirement to be submissive to her husband - to squirm in the dirt submissively
was meant to refer her submitting to his desire - and he believes his right - tobe on top; which would
force her to squirm in the dirt. I may not have been successful atgetting that across, however.
I think (though given how wrong I've been so far, take this as you will) the problems is the ambiguity in 'her
requirement' - is the requirement her choice, or one imposed upon her? Your explanation suggests the latter, so
really it is 'my/N's requirement' or 'that which is expected of a wife'. Is the intent of the line the duty of a wife to
submission ?
There's also the change from the 'conversational' opening to this more formal articulation,which perhaps doesn't
flow as well as it might. And, though this will, all too likely, be wide of the mark, nonetheless ...
Damn that arrogant woman
whose unholy pride denies me my due
who denies me the duty a wife owes
to submit.
Are you sure about 'transfigurement' ? - a complete change of form or appearance into a more beautiful or spiritual
state - I don't see it, as a process, producing an 'abhorent whore', 'transformation' might.
Best, Knot.
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Hi Seraphim.
Thanks for the explanations (and clearly, the fault is this reader's
).Her requirement - the requirement to be submissive to her husband - to squirm in the dirt submissively
was meant to refer her submitting to his desire - and he believes his right - tobe on top; which would
force her to squirm in the dirt. I may not have been successful atgetting that across, however.
I think (though given how wrong I've been so far, take this as you will) the problems is the ambiguity in 'her
requirement' - is the requirement her choice, or one imposed upon her? Your explanation suggests the latter, so
really it is 'my/N's requirement' or 'that which is expected of a wife'. Is the intent of the line the duty of a wife to
submission ?
There's also the change from the 'conversational' opening to this more formal articulation,which perhaps doesn't
flow as well as it might. And, though this will, all too likely, be wide of the mark, nonetheless ...
Damn that arrogant woman
whose unholy pride denies me my due
who denies me the duty a wife owes
to submit.
Are you sure about 'transfigurement' ? - a complete change of form or appearance into a more beautiful or spiritual
state - I don't see it, as a process, producing an 'abhorent whore', 'transformation' might.
Best, Knot.
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