Townhouse Conductor - edit3

[Richard]

Hey Duke,
I like what you're going for here. I do have some suggestions though:

Townhouse Conductor


Black buzzard perches, statuary -I suggest you start with the second stanza (see below). My biggest concern with this stanza is how does the vulture in this stanza play into the metaphor of the conductor? Is he the audience or part of the symphony? 
on a copper-gleaming gable;
watches while, below, well-off dog-walkers
don't pick up their eunuchs' leavings. -I love how the dog-walkers are described, but I'm left waiting more about how they don't notice what is above them.
Down a townhouse block, another buzzard
stands sidewalk sentry, rusty-feathered -I feel like the description here isn't bad. However, it should play into the conductor metaphor more.  
by comparison with emerald,
illegal-tended lawns.

The master-vulture waits, shifts slightly
as if conducting this slow symphony: -I feel like this should be where you start your poem. It sets up the metaphor right away. The previous line should then end this stanza.
anticipates its coda,
on a page much closer
than dog-walkers thoughtlessly believe.-If you end on the first line, I think that would create wonderful juxtaposition between the thoughtless dog-walkers and the master-vulture.

Vacationing in the belly of the beast (a university town).  And I see things...

I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard