03-12-2019, 09:59 AM
I know! All excellent feedbacks, suggestions to genuinely improve the poem, but lose the form? Ahh!! Word choices! I liked knots suggestion because he kept the first letters just rearranged. But I think I'll keep the letters in order regardless. I think for me, I don't ever expect to write great poems and it's not necessarily a goal, but opening up readers or listeners to ideas they can take off with and modify their own creations might just satisfy me. Thank you all of you for the insight.
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