Wishes (edit V.2)

[Cesar]

Wishes


Eyes close
amidst hopeful concentration.
Donned in the setting sun’s array 
Dandelion seeds take flight, 
Carried by a mouth’s blow.

View of many things God-given fades
As every seed in the distance.
*
Dissatisfaction,
Wishes. 
*
Lips whispering; quivering
Coin in hand, then — plink.
A penny’s copper face meets 
The surface of algae-ridden water far below.

A face peers down the well’s mouth, 
To no avail, 
Not a trace of the sleek coin.

In the well’s cool musty depths, 
Every gift is hidden.
In her dark recesses, 
As light fleeting, 
Every blessing’s forgotten.
*
Hands fold expectantly, 
Gaze locks on a shooting star.
The heart’s aspirations
Muttered under breath;
Secret longings
Never to reach a human ear.

Trailing behind, 
Diffusing into the deep unpromising night sky,
The star’s trail lingers only to vanish.
With the tail, thankfulness ascends into 
Space eternal, 
Poof, 
Vanish.
*
Every heart’s discontentment
Manifest in a wish,
Must be let go, 
To fly away.

Whoosh, 
Lost in the wind.
Plink, 
Abandoned in the dark depths.
Let wishes, 
Testimonies of discontentment
diffuse into the night sky, 
Ascend into space eternal, 
Poof, 
Vanish.





Please give suggestions and criticize! I submit this for state competition tomorrow at 3:15 pm.