Tell Me Not

[billy]

hi homer, some of the cliches could be made original ideas. i get the feeling you going for period piece. to some extent you get there but at a cost. for it to work as a period piece it needs to be original. and have an image or two

Tell me not your troubles 

and mine you shall not hear



Tell me not your sorrows 

and I will not shed one tear



Tell me not your gaities

and I will not smile 

Tell me not your dreams

and I will not be beguiled 



Tell me not your truths

and I will speak no lie



Tell me not you love me
and I will surely die