11-21-2018, 12:48 AM
Hi duke,
not sure the final two lines are an improvement (rolls smiles, in particular)
but like the communal aspect of 'wine'. I'd suggest replacing 'wit' with
either 'noun' or 'verb' to follow on from 'adjectives'.
Best, Knot.
not sure the final two lines are an improvement (rolls smiles, in particular)
but like the communal aspect of 'wine'. I'd suggest replacing 'wit' with
either 'noun' or 'verb' to follow on from 'adjectives'.
Best, Knot.

