Edit - On His Lady's Anger At His Politics
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Our trouble with your hatred, love of mine,
is not its menace or my pain it gives–
but that dark innocence in which it lives,
ascribing malice which in truth is thine.

You cut and browbeat, dear; I merely pine
for times when there were soft alternatives
to argument and silence, adjectives
that gleamed with humor, wit shared over wine.

How can I let you see what you will not,
without becoming mirror to your vice
of mad denunciations, choking tears?
Calm, showing there's no evil, leering plot
abroad, but strength to wait until time’s dice
roll smiles again in place of phantom fears.



Thanks to all the valued critics.  Per @billy and @wildcard, those lazy archaisms/inversions have been eliminated.  Per @Knot particularly, I have not implemented every suggestion or addressed each criticism, but most of them.  Hope the changes to S2 don't harm the quality @wildcard found there.
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RE: On His Lady's Anger At His Politics - by Knot - 11-18-2018, 10:57 PM
RE: Edit - On His Lady's Anger At His Politics - by dukealien - 11-21-2018, 12:28 AM



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