11-14-2018, 08:19 PM
(10-31-2018, 05:10 AM)Leanne Wrote: I want to go back to tomorrowjust suggestions: storms (or another synonym) instead of winds in L2 to avoid the repetition?
with its open oceans and winds
that blow in unknown directions
instead of today, when the wind
was a voice that smothered me
and washed you away
L3 might use some other adjective, cos "unknown" is already implied in "open".
your use of past tense when talking about "today" made me think about the fact that there is no real now in the world of thoughts, instead one always decides to look to the near or not so near future or reminisce the past (and the latter is not automatically a bad thing).
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