rock heart

[billy]

i think the poem needs more. it needs to hold the reader and keep them in the poem even after they've read it. it's a pleasant poem and if that's was your aim you succeeded. personally i think it could be a really good pleasant poem if you could give the river and the sea more of an anthropomorphic feel, make them both live.

could you elaborate on what you mean by "depth" here?
your other remarks are noted, thanks!