10-30-2018, 05:45 AM
Thank you so much for these critiques. Before I make any edits I should note it's from challenge x during the ice princess poetry thing earlier this year, I wanted to write about Noah without saying Noah. That's a maori word I googled meaning Definition of noa - (in Maori society) not subject to religious or superstitious restriction; allowed.
Which seemed to fit. But since the challenge is over I can make it say Noah and change some other lines. I sort of started a series on natural disasters and am making this the flood poem, so it may end up more lyrical in the end, but being able to write a decent sonnet is in my wish list so I'm going to try for that first.
Which seemed to fit. But since the challenge is over I can make it say Noah and change some other lines. I sort of started a series on natural disasters and am making this the flood poem, so it may end up more lyrical in the end, but being able to write a decent sonnet is in my wish list so I'm going to try for that first.
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