Divorce
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Too much use of 'I' and 'You' narrows the possibilities of interpretation with any given poem! Also, it's gross.

(09-27-2018, 09:16 PM)applebear Wrote:  So here I sit once again.. 
This chair won't tie loose ends, but it brings more comfort than my and I have friends  I tried to string 'friends' and 'chair' together for fluidity sake 
but they don't lend their ear to feelings that I share (but the chair does lol!)
Do they care? Are they scared that I'm just I prey feeding on their lives less convoluted & more interesting in my opinion
and that I try to hold a lie that's always fleeting , you should go into depth bout how you're aware of lying and its ramifications 
Let them in. Let it go ew
Let it show what's within gross
Beneath the surface there is thumping 
with a purpose to keep punching my time this doesn't fit or correlate with anything 
I enjoy suffering very much in word form, but more so as a concept and less as explanation or something to be merely talked about - that's boring!
assholery not intended .
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Messages In This Thread
Divorce - by applebear - 09-27-2018, 09:16 PM
RE: Divorce - by billy - 09-28-2018, 11:20 AM
RE: Divorce - by cloud - 10-01-2018, 08:12 AM
RE: Divorce - by applebear - 10-05-2018, 09:55 PM
RE: Divorce - by PenPCB - 10-17-2018, 06:11 AM
RE: Divorce - by Ally - 10-24-2018, 08:38 PM
RE: Divorce - by applebear - 10-25-2018, 04:19 AM
RE: Divorce - by Ally - 10-26-2018, 02:24 AM
RE: Divorce - by Fredefup - 10-28-2018, 06:24 AM



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