Deep Game

[Knot]

Hi Duke,
nice idea but I think you're 'telling' too much:
cutting S2 would help (as would a different title,
maybe 'Recursion' or 'Next Level' or ?)

Just a suggestion:

Inside a simulation I play:
with people, streets, and buildings. There,
it rains in torrents. Lightning flashes


Outside, rain upon my roof
thunder shakes the windows –
- could you get rid of one of the 'mys'?
or was that a game-effect?
(I think ending on a question mark is weak,
maybe,
real as any game-effect ?)

Best, Knot.