09-10-2018, 11:42 AM
I liked the overall flow and rhythm of the poem!
I do think that you should try to add some more creative analogies/metaphors/lines, as this is a more common poetic topic. But the darker edge you have is very good.
I also liked that the last stanza was more positive and different from the rest, but I'm wondering if you can ease into it better, or if the abrupt change is good the way it is.
I do think that you should try to add some more creative analogies/metaphors/lines, as this is a more common poetic topic. But the darker edge you have is very good.
I also liked that the last stanza was more positive and different from the rest, but I'm wondering if you can ease into it better, or if the abrupt change is good the way it is.