Meter and Experimentation

[Leanne]

So, you have used enjambment, and I don't really see that the meter's badly used - in fact, you do have variations from traditional sonnetry at least if you count your slight caesuras and fairly light tone. It's not ponderous and neither is it a dull da-dum da-dum. I will go and check out the full version.

But I'd say it sounds like one guy's opinion and fair play to him, but he's got the wrong reason for his boredom.