Last Independence - edit2, title change

[Knot]

Hi duke.

Still not convinced by the title,
and the repetition in the first line
doesn't help. (Why not;
'Will this be my last,
of [a] vaunted solitary life...' ?)

Alternatively, keep L1 and change the title
to 'Last Fourth of July' ?
I think you could cut 'lame', it's implied
(is 'nudging' the right word?)

I agree with nozaki about 'Please',
how about;
'Spare me those months...' ?
Maybe 'an easy' for 'unexpected' (which is
a bit harsh, sonically, amongst all those
esses)
Perhaps cut 'routine'? I like the sonics,
(sleep/meeting/routine/dream)
but does anyone use the phrase 'routine
dream'? (And, again, it is it's implied.)
Personal preference (L8)
'at least it should secure us'

Best, Knot.