First Edit: Weather Warning

[alonso ramoran]

Weather Warning

Those words remind me of snowflakes we've tasted- colon here instead of dash? 
individuality lost on our tongues. I like your start. I agree w Todd on his sentiments of staying with the image. "Melted" would be a nice change

Darkening sky could be your memory.
The storm begins quiet as tears 
hidden beneath a blanket too heavy for one; I'm not sure if "hidden" is the word you're looking for in the context of this simile where a blanket is too heavy. Maybe something like "smothered"? Idk, even then it still doesn't make much sense... the blanket simile just feels a bit like it doesn't belong in spite of the mention of a bed in this stanza's fifth line.
growing wind becomes louder than arguments
about whose turn it was to make the bed. 
Eventual whiteout a lonely climax, missing comma between whiteout and a
your joke about the polar bear in a blizzard.

Night returns silence, like it always does,
yesterday a ghost vanquished by daylight. Although these lines do sound nice, I fail to see their importance as the poem's conclusion. Maybe I'm missing something.

If I was to guess specifically on what type of storm this poem is talking about, I would say blizzard. The blanket simile makes much more sense in that context (blankets of snow), yet I still can't see how tears are quiet since tears are inherently quiet. I still stand by my comments on the last stanza but I will say I like this image of "a ghost being vanquished by daylight"; the image is something like watching overnight snow evaporate in morning light.

i take it this is about the death of a s/o?

Best, Alex