Last Independence - edit2, title change

[dukealien]

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Last Independence Day


Will this be my last Independence Day
of vaunted solitary life
on two feet, two pedaled wheels
before a cane puts in a spoke
or walker-shuffling starts:
lame, nudging ruptured tennis balls?

If science can’t eternalize our youth
it should at least learn to ensure
unexpected passing in one’s sleep
mistaking that first meeting
with Saint Peter for a routine dream
of disappointed father-figures
without months of intubated drowning
and dementia which can’t even form
a reasoned willingness
to end.

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Thanks, @Knot - good critique.    This edit doesn't trim it down as much as you might wish, but streamlines a bit, I hope.

Science owes us a better death because its "advances" have procured the likelihood of such a wretched one.