Most Becoming of You

[homer1950]

I like the irony in the conclusion, but I'm having a hard time with the cliched "happy as a lark" and "living hell". The other issue I'm having is that this poem is relying heavily on adjectives rather than imagery to do the heavy lifting. That said, I do like lighted dark. I'd give some thought to imagery over excessive modifiers.

Hope the comments help some.

Best,

Todd

Thanks Todd I appreciate your time and thoughtful critique.