July

[homer1950]

Like the other piece I commented on I believe you are trying to hard. You are a good writer and very descriptive, I would say edit this down to only what you want say.  I will give you the “Butch Cassidy and Sundance Kid” advice. One stick of dynamite opens the safe two sticks blows up the money. There are plenty of poems in your future and you have a nice arsenal of words. You don’t need to use them all, all the time. Hope this helps
Homer