06-26-2018, 01:35 AM
Rowans- thank you for some very helpful feedback. This gives me a lot to chew on... especially the end goal of what I want the reader to walk away with... a simple observation without implied commentary makes for a poem that is lacking in purpose, and I think the result is that the reader is trying to find implied commentary where it may not really exist. I need to hone in on my purpose with this in the next revision and I think that will help.
Knot- thank you for tightening up some of the wording. I really liked some of your suggestions and will work them into my next edit.
Knot- thank you for tightening up some of the wording. I really liked some of your suggestions and will work them into my next edit.