Lost

Lost

Jackintheroom
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#11

06-24-2018, 04:38 AM

Hey, Very meaningful obviously, only critique is I feel like towards the end the line

"I can't walk
Those paths."

could be one line maybe. Just my humble opinion though I liked it alot.

Kind Regards - Jack

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